I wrote lyrics for a song. Can you help me to discover mistakes?

A PLACE BEYOND INSANE

[Verse #1]

Together we’re floating through space and time

A space full of loneliness and emptiness

You’re wrtiting a book about us

But our story begins in the last chapter

I keep on closing the book against my own will

My story is ending before it even began

[Prechorus]

You don’t need me, but I need you

Enough is never enough, more, more more…

Why can’t I stop abusing us?

[Chorus]

This is a place beyond insane

But I can’t run away

The water is rising but I forgot how to swim

I’m begging you to save me from drowning

But you keep on pushing me away

Because you don’t care abaout me

But I’m too blind to see

[Verse #2]

You give me a home, a place to be

I give you all the worst that I have

You give me shelter, a place to fullfill my dreams

All I leave behind is death and dispair

My lungs are filled with air you create

You keep my blood running trough my veins

But I am the weak, you’re much tougher

I can’t stand a chance, my ignorance is killing me

[Bridge/Breakdown]

I keep telling me everything is gonna be okay

But everytime I look in the mirror I see nothing but lies

I am not able to realize that I got this one chance left

Instead I put the gun to my head and pull the trigger

I (30 years old, from Germany) play bass in a Band and I wrote a song. Those are the lyrics. Can you help me to discover mistakes. And I would like to know what you thing about it :) Thank you!

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